Wednesday, October 05, 2005

funnel haiku 10 : amusement

When thinking of you
what is missing from my thought?
how are you absent?

you steal away
such is your pleasure
very often

think about
a new kind of


Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I like these funnel Haikus!

You can make real funnels by centering those.

Thu Oct 06, 11:22:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Hi Gautami --
true, one could (hadn't thought of that). With the "funnel" notion, I was more thinking of sounding-length than of the "visuality" of the lines. And for whatever reason, I've had difficulty responding to line-centered poetry (strange to say). Perhaps someday I'll get over that. ;-)
I think the tri-ku series may now be complete. I write this now, with the number at 14. For all I know it may go further. Anyway: when I've a chance perhaps I'll return to prose in Kirwani. I'd perhaps like to keep some balance between the 2 modes.
thanks for the visit!

Thu Oct 06, 02:15:00 PM PDT  

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