Wednesday, September 28, 2005

"Keyings" (a villanelle)

What are we human beings?
a semblance of the true
such bindings & such freeings!

Our youings & our meings
well land us in a stew!
what are we human beings?

How subtle grow our gleeings
(I whisper "how are you?")
such bindings & such freeings

As yearnings seek for seeings
we sizzle through & through
what are we human beings?

The sheings & the heings
colliding points of view
with bindings & with freeings

O mountain goddess! keyings
of words were all for you
what are we human beings?
such bindings & such freeings!

(c) 2005 david raphael israel

a little lyric poem dashed off amid workday; yet happy with it, I'd initially "informally published" it on a literary discussion board (aka "network," hosted by Ryze, here villanelle {Caferati}), and now "memorialize" it on the present blog. In certain phases of life, I tend to compose poetry daily. Can't say to what extent I'll pour such effusions & efforts, effluents & effluvia into this e-space. Perchance to some modest degree...

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Blogger Max Babi said...

hi David,
This vilaneille is fascinating because you have used yr irrepressible, waggish sense of humor something I love doing myself... when I write limericks. Am very influenced by Ogden Nash. Your style reminds me of his sublte SOH.
Keep writing, this is fabulous.


Fri Sep 30, 04:41:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Ah Max Saheb,
thanks for your kind words! May be waggish true, yet I shy away from a certain "proud superficiality" in work like Nash's. There's another (more recent) guy, John Frederick Nims, who has keen wit but more (for me) depth. (Maybe I've just not imbibed Nash in right time & setting.) Here anyway is an examle of this Nims chap (hadn't seen his work in ages, but your note brought it back to mind):
Nims - Love Poem

See what I mean? He's charming, funny, even quite sarcastic & bombastic, and he exaggerates like nobody's business. But in the end he goes for the jugular of real emotion & no-shit love.

Your note I'll take as encouragement to put up more poems here (when I've a chance) -- perhaps posting some of new scribbles as they appear. BTW, have you seen the amusing small play we're lately writing as a collective effort here? --
Live-In (at Shakespeare & Co. on Ryze)
cheers, d.i.

Sat Oct 01, 08:32:00 AM PDT  
Blogger ~River~ said...

Yes, you are right. There's a wit and a certain comic timing in this one, but it also manages to speak clearly and concisely about the 'serious' stuff. That's something I admire!

Tue Oct 04, 09:18:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Ah River, you again.

(The villanelle mentions the mountain, what wonder if her friend the river shows up?)

Grazie & shukria,

Tue Oct 04, 02:27:00 PM PDT  

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