Thursday, October 06, 2005

tri-ku 12 : percussive

No one's a stranger
even one's own heart's unknown
all are strangers here

estrangement as
transcient effect
in a music

percussive
silent passage
whispery

2 Comments:

Blogger ~River~ said...

Oh, the funnel-ku has become a tri-ku overnight. Things do change quickly around these parts.

I like the sounds in the final verse. Very interesting alliteration.

Thu Oct 06, 02:52:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Yes, I decided "funnel haiku" had way too many syllables! ("Ku" does simply mean verse or poem; haiku is a more specific kind; "tri-ku" is polyglot.)

The notion of percussion as always involving silence (which gives it definition; ditto for utterance); and the "strange" of estrangement involving (fundamentally) change (hence transcience) -- these are things in mind & at play here.

cheers, d.i.

Thu Oct 06, 04:25:00 AM PDT  

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