Tuesday, October 04, 2005

villanelle whimsy

My thoughts emerge pell-mell
I place them in a row
& find a villanelle

Was there a way to tell
what swirled amid the snow
when thoughts emerged pell-mell?

I lade them from the well
admiring where they go
amid the villanelle

The tolling of the bell
had sorrows to bestow
as thoughts emerged pell-mell

The silence cannot quell
the burning & the glow
inside the villanelle

Within your forest fell
a tree I didn't know
when thoughts emerged pell-mell
within my villanelle

d.i.

6 Comments:

Blogger Patt said...

Sorry i dont get it

Tue Oct 04, 06:29:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Well, one reading of the final stanza might be: "I was unable to guess at the nature of your response as I set down my thoughts." (As I'm not "there," how am I to know what tree falls, what sound it makes, how things feel in inwardness of another?) Admittedly, incomprehension wasn't what I might've aimed / hoped for. Still, that's amid the range of sylvan possibilities.
cheers, d.i.

Tue Oct 04, 07:30:00 AM PDT  
Blogger ~River~ said...

I've never tried a vilanelle before. You make it look easy!

Tue Oct 04, 09:14:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

River,
hope you try!
The form can be lovely in its sort of "folk-dance" quality: a peculiar formalism that can be "idea-generative." (Think of it as dance-steps perhaps?) Overall, I find it more charming than say the sonnet. (There's that potential for a hint of the hypnotic.) The repetition makes it a "meditative" form, no?

These kinds of forms are good trying first simply as an exercise or an experiment. Then one may develop one's own approach & relationship with them.

I'll relax in my (imagined) easychair and look toward yours . . .
btw thanks for stopping by here; I'm a blogo-newbie you'll note.

cheers, d.i.

Tue Oct 04, 10:00:00 AM PDT  
Blogger Enemy of the Republic said...

Hey, this is really good. What other forms do you work with? Nicely done, David! I've tried the sestina before, but I am not Ezra Pound!

Tue Oct 04, 02:01:00 PM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Enemy my Friend --
I'm relieved to learn you're not Ezra Pound. Had you been, you'd be quite an old man by now!

What forms do I favor? I've dabbled in many (and invented many others); but forms I resort to most are the villanelle, the ghazal, and the shi [8-line form from classical Chinese]. Also, the rubai [aaba quatrain, a sorta-sibling of the ghazal; the plural is rubaiyat: think Khayyam]. In future postings, perchance I'll present (inter alia) specimens exemplifying all of these.

Oh, I also like the Pantoum. I've only recently dipped a few toes in it (including some group Pantoum composition, in fun).

cheers, d.i.

Tue Oct 04, 02:24:00 PM PDT  

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