Mona Lisa's Ghazal
. . . The result showed the painting's famous subject was 83 percent happy, 9 percent disgusted, 6 percent fearful and 2 percent angry. She was less than 1 percent neutral, and not at all surprised.-- "Scientists Figure Out
Why Mona Lisa Smiles"
I'm thrilled to see you dear! though not at all surprised
with barely a smidge of fear I'm not at all surprised
at times (might I concede?) you seem a tad disgusting!
but that won't impede my cheer! I'm not at all surprised
remember when you whispered "I love you" seven times?
I'm eight-tenths happy here! while not at all surprised
what critic called me "neutral"? for half a sec I'm miffed!
but let's make one thing clear I'm not at all surprised
if down the lane they're gossipping I'm pregnant? let 'em talk!
I deem them all my children (really not am I surprised)
mia vita! how you capture me! (after these endless sittings)
Leo! you're beyond all peer! but well no I'm not surprised
the river (in my background) it's from hills (outside my frame)
hey you brought a jar of beer? that's cool! (unsurprised)
when Mona confided how she might desire you as her painter
her happiness became clear? & you weren't (sweet doll) surprised?
posted by david raphael israel at 2:21 AM
11 Comments:
hahahahahaha!!!
What fun! Really enjoyed reading this David.
Pragya
what fun!, i echo
That was clever - I can tell you had fun writing it. It shows in the fun we all had reading.
Very witty, d.i. Made me chuckle.
Isn't chuckle a strange word?
VasudevMurthy
PrakyaThakur
AnnieZeidi
Indie & River!
shukria grazie
xie-xie danke
[*bows & smiles*
*thinks himself clever*]
-- really it cannot (as I noted in a discussion thread elsewhere) be said to amount to a "serious ghazal" (per se), but I enjoyed writing it (yes) anyway. I like to think there's an element of (perhaps not unsuitable) ambiguity in some of the lines...
also gave me a chance to study the painting in a different way. Famous or not, it's a sweet painting. The half-visible breasts of the woman would possibly be deemed more provocative in contemporary times than in DaVinci's (?? or maybe I'm off my rocker abt this), except that contemp. eyes are so trained to think "famous classic" when looking at the image, that this detail perchance tends to go unnoticed. And there's more depth-of-warmth in her gaze (my "study" declares) than I'd taken in heretofore, seems.
cheers,
d.i.
ps River: good point about chuckle.
In America, there's also the very strange nicname Chucklehead -- or at least I've heard it; [maybe it was somebody's local (not-pervasive) revision of knucklehead]. Chuckle, buckle and knuckle -- only 3 such words, apparenntly. Though with other vowels, we also have tinkle, sparkle, spangle, heckle, hackle, and pickle. Also jingle-jangle. There was an old song, I've got spurs that jingle, jangle, jingle....
d.i.
ps-- Max!
we were typing contemporaneously; so I missed you in my rhyme above. Merci to you too.
d.i.
Thanks for a good laugh.
LOL, great work! and what nice rythm "not at all surprised" gives to it. can we dance to it?
Doug--
pleased to learn that even a(n internet-savvy) dog is not lacking for a sense of humor; obliged.
Ariel --
by all means, dance!
And thanks for your remarks.
cheers, d.i.
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