Thursday, January 26, 2006

"Like three wishes"           [quasi-rictameter]

it seems


like three wishes


you're granted by a djinn


usually the first is wasted


the second likewise will come to no good


but you had best watch for the third


this is where everything


turns on its head!


(it seems)


written for an exercise
vide: Exercise - Poetry - Rictameter
(Caferati on Ryze)

[ps -- I messed up; a real rictameter is based on count of syllables, not count of words. should be in lines 2/4/6/8/10/8/4/6/2 syllables; I did that, but counting whole words. So this is a new something, but not properly a rictameter. I'll classify it as a quasi-rictameter.]

3 Comments:

Blogger Twisted Humor Inc. said...

hey - now that form coupled with that blend of font colour is real imaginative...!!!

deadly...!!!

Fri Jan 27, 03:59:00 AM PST  
Blogger cactusjump said...

liked 'Is it conscionable?' a lot more - lol!

Fri Jan 27, 10:32:00 AM PST  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Twist,
thanks again --
I suppose there's a lot one can do messing with these simple elements in such a space, if one takes the time. This has seemed a curious "illustration" of the "concept" of the form. ;-)

CactusJump,

oh, you liked that poem more than you like this one? -- I wasn't even 100% sure I would bother blogging that one ;-) -- but on strength of your remark, perhaps I will. But it waits to be seen where this series goes with a 3rd one (if, that is, I fail to take my own advice and do write a 3rd one). Time will tell . . .

cheers,
d.i.

Fri Jan 27, 11:08:00 AM PST  

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