Saturday, February 04, 2006

"winter's chill"         [rubai]

  spring has still   to return
                        to my heart
  winter's chill   I discern
                        in my heart
  do my eyes   perceive no
                        rosey flame?
  bulbuls will   again burn
                        in my heart




This pleasantry is partially modeled on, and could be deemed (rhetorically) a "reply to" Rupa's first try at composing a rubai

1 Comments:

Anonymous ArchanaD said...

nice one... but i feel that thelast line does not gel with the 1st three lines.

Sat Feb 04, 11:30:00 PM PST  

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