Tuesday, March 07, 2006

"Most poems"             [ditty]

Most days the sun is blue
most hours the wind is green
most poems are mostly mellow
most waking life is dream

most faucets give forth milk
most parrots speak in rhymes
most poems are nothing at all
but preposterous paradigms

most trees desire to walk
most cars are prone to speed
most poems are mostly hobbled
by exigency or need

most skies are dark as pitch
most clouds are white as salt
most poems are mostly whatsit?
"imperfect" by default

[Inspired by this discussion.]


Blogger Batul said...

Read the poem, and most of the discussion too. I'm not too good at poetry, don't know it's forms too well, so the discussion was a little above my head. Your poem, or ditty, however, evokes many thoughts, many colors. I like particularly the green wind. It expresses in many ways what I often feel about poems.

Tue Mar 07, 07:14:00 AM PST  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

ah how nice, thanks ;-)


Tue Mar 07, 08:32:00 AM PST  
Blogger Batul said...

Dear David,

Thanks for the special boomerang poem for me. This is a first for me, that is having a poem in my name. Have to check on "plagal" and "silage" though, are they real words, or coined by you. '

This poem makes me see myself back in Bhuj, filming my documentary after the quake.

Tue Mar 07, 11:37:00 PM PST  
Blogger Batul said...

Thank you David, for taking the time to make the explanations. Like everything else, the more you learn, the more meanings you see, and the more you enjoy. Look forward to seeing the final version. Regards

Wed Mar 08, 04:27:00 AM PST  
Blogger ~River~ said...

Wowie. This be good stuff!

Wed Mar 08, 07:13:00 AM PST  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

btw, I'm particularly happy with the line "most parrots speak in rhymes"; they do so at least in most poetries that quote from them!

Batul, as elsewhere noted, that boomerang poem's now blogged. About your documentary, do you describe it somewhere on your blog? I gather that you photo was snapped when you were on-site in midst of that? btw the term ghetto blaster is odd American argot (based on the popularity of boomboxes in certain parts of some major cities, at least historically; I don't know if the stereotype [so to say] still holds).

Gracia, River. ;-)


Thu Mar 09, 08:28:00 AM PST  
Anonymous fingertree said...

Very nice!

Thu Mar 09, 10:43:00 AM PST  

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