Friday, April 21, 2006

Circadian Transport      [descending poem]


Switching from bus to
taxicab while talking
on cellphone halfway
down sixteenth street

is not unfamiliar to me
this occurs when running
late & calling Xiaodong

in Beijing where like here
spring is in bloom


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The "descending poem" form is explained and illustrated by Jill Chan on her blog. On the Buffalo Poetics listserv, she invited others to give it a try. Hence the above.

5 Comments:

Blogger Jill said...

hi david. good one. i'm very glad you tried the form out. the turn that you have here towards the last stanza is well done. thanks.

Fri Apr 21, 06:22:00 PM PDT  
Blogger ~River~ said...

What a fun, liquid form. Will give it a try one of these days!

Mon Apr 24, 07:09:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

Thanks Jill; your approach to outlining a form conceptually, is a nice one. Of course, one could call it a 3-act play in miniature. ;-)
River -- yes, you must!

Mon Apr 24, 07:55:00 PM PDT  
Anonymous Kunal Goel said...

excellent poem!
your blog is full of spam comments!

Fri May 19, 12:25:00 PM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

thanks Kunal.
I've (at least temporarily) turned on "word verification" for the first time on my blog -- due to the sudden incursion of spam. In a matter of some few hours, I got upwards of 200 blog spam comments! (typically upwards of 8 per post) -- a rather weird way of spending the first hours of my birthday, deleting, one by one, these gratuitous, robotic posts. Ah well, at least I remain extant.

cheers,
d.i.

Fri May 19, 11:32:00 PM PDT  

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