Monday, May 08, 2006

"Fifteen raindrops"       [modified boomerang]

Fifteen raindrops plopped in a puddle
    thirteen leaves were swirled in wind
eleven people were lookin' for trouble
    nine policemen came 'round the bend

    seven doctors saw saven patients
five poets found themselves in a muddle
    three birds perched & sang flirtations
one more raindrop plopped in the puddle


Blogger Blue Athena said...

Very different from the rest...

So, what's this number game all about?

Tue May 09, 08:41:00 PM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

I'm lately experimenting a bit (for fun) with ways of playing with numbers in verses. This is one result of that. And above it is another. ;-) I was rather happy with the one above, surprised that it could "work" simply to run through a sequence of numbers and somehow they suffice to hold the structure together -- as if you were building a brick wall with blue bricks, but at random (or in some kind of order) you could also put in red bricks here and there. Even though the blue bricks might be part of a design (say a large mural, done in various shades of blue), and the red bricks might seem arbitrary (not part of a pictorial mural image), still, they all work to hold up the wal, and if you were to remove the red bricks, the wall would fall down!
-- something like that, is (I'd say) seen in the (one two) poem above. I've lately done a few other number experiments not seen here right now. Like fingerpainting: you see if anything interesting is possible!

Wed May 10, 06:18:00 PM PDT  

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