Tuesday, June 13, 2006

"RIP"       | 11   [trilimerick]


There once was a fellow in France
who rarely if given a chance
would fail to phone
one girl who alone
inspired his sense of romance
he later went off to Tangiers
the outpost would hold him for years
when postcards grew fewer
the girl keenly knew her
old phone had grown wacky with fears
the telephone finally died
she buried it one dim eventide
she wrote "RIP"
on a grave by the sea
where the darkling horizon loomed wide




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Regarding this newly-invented form, the trilimerick (or triple limerick):

I find the tripling (and thus extending into a more detailed story) more satisfying than the so-clipped, solitary limerick form; -- or at least more satisfying for a sense of modest narrative dimension. It pulls away from the quick cartoon punch, and becomes perhaps a bit more like a watercolor

These thoughts somewhat follow from my lately-blogged sequence, A Limerick Peers in the Mirror.

2 Comments:

Blogger ~River~ said...

I have always had a soft corner for the limerick and have preached about how it should be put to 'serious' uses.

I like this 'trilimerick'. Perhaps I could try writing one too.

Tue Jun 13, 10:43:00 PM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

ah nice to hear your views.
As for the trilimerick -- yes do. Naturally, one could even extend the form further. it really is, for me, analogous to the multi-panel painting -- like east asian paintings on screens, for instance.

Wed Jun 14, 09:54:00 PM PDT  

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