Friday, September 08, 2006

"Eighteen attributes"         [responsive poem]

Eighteen attributes of a person
like eighteen names of a diety
bead after bead makes a strand
multiple frames make a movie
manifold aspects show a mind
a slew of days compose a world
rubbed teak man   suggests savoir faire
also cardboard man   suggests emptiness
unleaded man   may connote empathy
thus reaching man   could point to trickery
arranged man   bespeaks manipulation
consistently displayed man   sums the information
determining qualities of persons
is a talent like midwifery or pharmacy
where language is the tool of assessment
poetry daubs its recordations of noticing
the fine line betwixt appreciation
and accusation   clicks negotiably

responsive to Sheila Murphy's poem entitled You're


Blogger Sheila Murphy said...

David, thank you! Very nice work, and I especially like your final line.

Fri Sep 08, 09:06:00 AM PDT  
Blogger david raphael israel said...

ah, good ;-)
yes, there's some odd play in the final couplet I'd say.
Good poems sometimes call for responsive poems. Perhaps our literary culture could use a bit more of this, these days.

Fri Sep 08, 09:27:00 AM PDT  

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